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The tirade in the comic was so harsh and out of character that I decided to take a crack at rewriting it. First off, made it rhyme, taking some of the show’s examples for how lenient she can be with her rhyming structure. I also replaced the ‘your mom dead fuck you’ part with something lighter/fun. Finally, like with other times Zecora corrects someone’s behavior, I had her turn her “poem” into a lesson. Feels more in character, I think.
Sorry about the text sizes changing, didn’t feel like editing the bubbles between edits/rewriting bits and pieces of this new fanscript. Left the last panel in to show that the new rewrite fits the spirit of what was being conveyed by the original.
Anyways, could be better, but I think it’s already an improvement over ‘your mom dead fuck you’.
Sorry about the text sizes changing, didn’t feel like editing the bubbles between edits/rewriting bits and pieces of this new fanscript. Left the last panel in to show that the new rewrite fits the spirit of what was being conveyed by the original.
Anyways, could be better, but I think it’s already an improvement over ‘your mom dead fuck you’.
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I agree. Having Zecora suddenly not rhyme when she’s that mad doesn’t seem out of character to me. In fact, Applejack noticed that later in the comic and even asked why she wasn’t rhyming. The whole point is that she dropped her usual wise and mystical self because she got so angry. Which indicates to the readers something is very wrong and deeply personal for her.
Fans in any fandom can be so touchy.
It was an example to show that more you know about a character, more you could understand it.
This story will give us more infos about Zecora, ad with theme we could undertand if something is IC for her or not.
Hmmm… Celestia’s had plenty of good reasons to be angry and even then, they weren’t fits of rage.
Maybe because we didn’t know the character so well… Think about: what did we know about Zecora? She had very little screentime, it couldn’t be blunt because we never saw her so much to say this.
Celestia in the first seasons was always so calm and wise, but now, after years, she could be angry or silly and still IC.
Hmmmm… maybe because it’s a dumb written plot in the first place? Now I don’t really mind and all for stuff like that, but it’s quite clearly blunt and out of nowhere.
Humans can’t be pigeon holed like that, and I’d hope ponies aren’t like that.
We only see Zecora be a fairly one note character. She’s the calm wise rhyming plot device.
So why are we not allowed to see her CRACK a bit?
I’m so sick of entitlement to control of character development that fans from all fandoms have.
Azerdoe:
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It’s still got that whole ‘dead mom’ thing in there, which is wildly out of character.
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Perfectly in character
Got to agree with this