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Twilight Sparkle was just chilling in their castle when Susnet Shimmer ran out through the portal and asked them for help.
Apperantley, Scorpan had managed to find out about the human world and planted a Schlembujah aka “Mind-Control-Plant” in there. While there have been rumors that someone is running back and forth between the Worlds in an attempt to spread information between them. Twilight became quite worried about this out of fear that threats from Equestria could come over to that world and vice-versa. So she dropped the book she was reading and decided along with Spike to help Sunset.
Because I had prior knowledge about the Schlembujah’s, Twilight also asked me to join them on the mission to discover and destroy it. I agreed to help, after hearing from Suger Belle, a former employer of “Scorpan enterprizes”, about the “culprit” that has been running between the worlds. So the four of us entered the portal and ended up in the human world, in the middle of the night (night in that world). As you could have guessed, I was shocked to see that Spike and the Girls had transformed into a dog and humans respectivly. But perhaps not as shocked as they were when I stayed as a pony in that world.
Twilight: Smash? Why are you still a pony?
Smash: Huh? Is it a problem?
Twilight: Erhm… Not really, I was just surprised that you didn’t transform.
Smash: Well, I don’t mind. flirty wink
Twilight: Smash, please stop it. It’s embarrassing.
Smash: Transformed or not, I still find you to be quite the beauty. But I must say that your sense of fashion is odd. Sparkly, but odd!
Sunset: GUYS! Remember why we are here.
Twilight: Yes, Sunset. Do you know where the others are?
Sunset: We’ll have to find a place to sleep. Because I forgot about the time-diference between the worlds, we have to wait till tomorrow before we start searching for them.
Twilight: Yes of course, I am quite tired myself. Let’s go!
Background was found on MLP wiki
Twilight by sketchmcreations
Sunset by uponia
Spike by dashiesparkle
https://www.deviantart.com/journal/An-expanded-Headcannon-706941104
Apperantley, Scorpan had managed to find out about the human world and planted a Schlembujah aka “Mind-Control-Plant” in there. While there have been rumors that someone is running back and forth between the Worlds in an attempt to spread information between them. Twilight became quite worried about this out of fear that threats from Equestria could come over to that world and vice-versa. So she dropped the book she was reading and decided along with Spike to help Sunset.
Because I had prior knowledge about the Schlembujah’s, Twilight also asked me to join them on the mission to discover and destroy it. I agreed to help, after hearing from Suger Belle, a former employer of “Scorpan enterprizes”, about the “culprit” that has been running between the worlds. So the four of us entered the portal and ended up in the human world, in the middle of the night (night in that world). As you could have guessed, I was shocked to see that Spike and the Girls had transformed into a dog and humans respectivly. But perhaps not as shocked as they were when I stayed as a pony in that world.
Twilight: Smash? Why are you still a pony?
Smash: Huh? Is it a problem?
Twilight: Erhm… Not really, I was just surprised that you didn’t transform.
Smash: Well, I don’t mind. flirty wink
Twilight: Smash, please stop it. It’s embarrassing.
Smash: Transformed or not, I still find you to be quite the beauty. But I must say that your sense of fashion is odd. Sparkly, but odd!
Sunset: GUYS! Remember why we are here.
Twilight: Yes, Sunset. Do you know where the others are?
Sunset: We’ll have to find a place to sleep. Because I forgot about the time-diference between the worlds, we have to wait till tomorrow before we start searching for them.
Twilight: Yes of course, I am quite tired myself. Let’s go!
Background was found on MLP wiki
Twilight by sketchmcreations
Sunset by uponia
Spike by dashiesparkle
https://www.deviantart.com/journal/An-expanded-Headcannon-706941104
I Know they can be annoying but the more detail the better the story, also I feel your pain with writing Fanfics(I can have an idea but the moment I get to something I can type on I forget the whole thing and will end up remembering some of the idea either a moth or year later, I’ve pretty much given up on thinking of writing my ideas, as of now When I get an idea i just roll with it until I forget it later)
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Oh, I am sorry to have assumed your age(no this isn’t sarcasm, i’m actually sorry, I’ve been dealing with annoying kids a lot today, also thank you for being respectful with our argument here, most people usually get pissy and curse for no real reason), thank you for notifying the person who made these, and what I meant was the stories need more detail which these are really lacking, the concept is mostly fine and the editing is on good, but the writing is my real problem(the whole OCxCannon(s) ship thing is something i’m mostly indifferent about)
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actually this profile image I have is ss2sonic’s art of spike doing the pose that Joseph Jostar does in JOJO’s Bizarre adventure, now for a far better question: Why are you speaking for this person? If they really cared what I(and some others) had to say they’d comment them self, i’m sure they don’t need you speaking for them.
Now kid go get a life and learn to mind your own business.
No , it’s not just a general opinion, this is legitimately bad writing from the stand point from someone who has judges stories and peoples writing, there is a huge difference in telling a good story and telling a bad story, this person has the skill to write but they aren’t fully channeling good stories, at best these are all decent
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I’m not gonna waste my time on DA cause number 1. I’m not gonna waste my time writing the same thing I just typed. Number 2. I’m not gonna give this person my direct attention cause these are harmful to my eyes(it’s decent editing, but these concepts and “stories” are just kinda just horrible in general.)
don’t take this as full on hate but as advice