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Page 9 finally completed. And this wraps up chapter 2.
 
Really not happy with Rarity’s mane in that last scene. It’s the angle.
 
And just to reiterate, the 40k parts of the comic (chapters 3-8) are NOT going Equestria Girls.  
The ponies stay ponies.
 
Next page >>1099020

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40kponyguy
Cutest Little Devil - Celebrated the 14th anniversary of MLP:FIM!
Rainbow Rocks 10th Anniversary: Sonata Dusk - Celebrated the 10th anniversary of EQG Rainbow Rocks!
Nightmare in the Moon - Had their OC in the 2024 Derpibooru Collab.
Celestial Glory - Helped others get their OC into the 2024 Derpibooru Collab.
Shimmering Smile - Celebrated the 10th anniversary of Equestria Girls!
Crystal Roseluck - Had their OC in the 2023 Derpibooru Collab.
Flower Trio - Helped others get their OC into the 2023 Derpibooru Collab.
King Sombra - Celebrated the 10th anniversary of The Crystal Empire!
A Lovely Nightmare Night - Celebrated the 12th anniversary of MLP:FIM!
Princess of Love - Extra special version for those who participated in the Canterlot Wedding 10th anniversary event by contributing art.

AimingToPlease,OftenMiss
@Tetrominon  
I know what you mean with the repeating faces. I’ve only really done it this way for conversation scenes. There’s not a lot of those in the rest of the story. These pages were just explaining what’s going on and why. I think chapter 3’s speech amounts to the equivalent of 2 pages of what’s gone before.
 
Bit of action next.
Tetrominon
Solar Supporter - Fought against the New Lunar Republic rebellion on the side of the Solar Deity (April Fools 2023).
Non-Fungible Trixie -
Bronze Bit -
Speaking Fancy - For helping with translations
Happy Derpy! -

Undesirable
Your layout and composition still need a lot of work - all these close-up panels of talking heads may as well have been copy-pasted, and the repetition makes reading a chore. Those last two panels are a step in the right direction, though it would have been a more dramatic reveal in the last one if you’d broken up Celestia’s line so that she was saying “I pray for your success” as they all looked out onto the hopeless deathscape that is the 40k universe.
40kponyguy
Cutest Little Devil - Celebrated the 14th anniversary of MLP:FIM!
Rainbow Rocks 10th Anniversary: Sonata Dusk - Celebrated the 10th anniversary of EQG Rainbow Rocks!
Nightmare in the Moon - Had their OC in the 2024 Derpibooru Collab.
Celestial Glory - Helped others get their OC into the 2024 Derpibooru Collab.
Shimmering Smile - Celebrated the 10th anniversary of Equestria Girls!
Crystal Roseluck - Had their OC in the 2023 Derpibooru Collab.
Flower Trio - Helped others get their OC into the 2023 Derpibooru Collab.
King Sombra - Celebrated the 10th anniversary of The Crystal Empire!
A Lovely Nightmare Night - Celebrated the 12th anniversary of MLP:FIM!
Princess of Love - Extra special version for those who participated in the Canterlot Wedding 10th anniversary event by contributing art.

AimingToPlease,OftenMiss
Here’s hoping this gets a better reception than the last page I did for the comic.
 
My daughter’s still pestering me for more of this story, so on with the next page I guess.
 
Her favourite part up to press is the page where Pinkie’s in Lyra’s face >>980786  
I was quite happy with how that part played out. Got Pinkie’s character spot on there.